Julian Suarez
October 14, 2009
Value Essay
Value is merely worth and significance. Some things are of financial value, others are of a value not relative to money. It can be value of a memory, moment, routine, or any other thing that value money can’t buy. But what is the more valuable of the two? Is it the diamond ring that's proposed with or is it the wedding and marriage itself? Is it the gift received on a birthday or is the party that's thrown and the friends that are there? What is the more valuable?
I sit in the living room with my Skullcandies tucked firm and tight into my grateful ears. It’s early morning on a weekday and I am ready to leave for school. I bob my head to the song that plays in my ears. The sweet sound of music. I listen to a wide variety of music, from rocking out with Linkin Park to rapping with Drake “Drizzy” Rogers. I know every song by Drake, therefore rapping with the underground artist comes like singing the alphabet to me.
I have everything for music. I probably have every genre in music with the exception of two. When you say “Country” my heart turns black and the sound of Opera makes me gag. My ears are charcoal and burn easily when I hear these sorry excuses for music, so you can infer that I most definitely avoid those music genres. Although I greatly despise these types of music there’s one thing that ticks me off even more. That is definitely when people talk to me. I don’t like when my music flow is interrupted. I usually get in the mood of the song and tune people out, therefore when I am interrupted, I get ticked off. If you want to be cool with me that would be the last thing I suggest you do.
I think left, right, left, right as my feet roll and take me away. I may not be the best there, but I am not the worst either. I like to think I am decent. My girlfriend and I hold hands and everything is perfect with my life. I forget all of the negativity and put it all behind me. We hold hands and look each other in the eyes. My love gets lost in my eyes as I lose myself in hers. We almost trip up, but the love and strength of our tight grasp cannot break for at this stage in life and the rest, separation is no option for either of us. Our skates turn and when I make the turn, I feel as if I have accomplished one of my biggest obstacles of life. We continue to skate now going straight and we stop and return to the table area. I then look for my other friends and skate with them.
Interskate 91 of Hadley mall is one of the funnest places to go on a Friday. The best time to go is between 6:30 and 10:30 which is the night skate. If you don't like it there, which is almost impossible, you can always roam the rest of the mall. There's games, food and people. Most people who go there are from South Hadley, so you're bound to a find friends there.
It's not the food or games or skating that makes it such the perfect thing, it's my best friends, friends, and especially my girlfriend. It's the ideal way to hang out with them and have a great time.
I value both going to Interskate and my Walkman for they are both similar and different. Although my Walkman is so small, it can surprise you on the huge impact it has on me or any other person. Interskate may be one place, but it's where I let my feelings and all the problems stay behind me. Positive things are all that run through my mind. Both, however put me in a mood and that job gets done by music. I can relax and be happy to a song my girlfriend loves, just because she's always jammin' out in front of me, which is cute or I can be tense and thoughtful to a song like "Love You More" by Eminem.
What I value is what can help me keep a good mood and help me relax. As my Walkman serves me happiness through music and flow, Interskate serves my happiness through my girlfriend and friends. When one isn't there, another is. My sleek Walkman serves my weekdays, during school and the blast I have at Interskate serves my weekend. Both work together to make me an elated person and maintain a positive mood which is very significant in my daily lfe.
1.The author talks about value. He says that value is merely worth and signifigance. He says that value can do with money or it cannot; it depends. The two thing he values are listening to his music on his Walkman and going to Intersakte 91 with friends.
ReplyDelete2. I found the part of the story with the Walkman most vividly decribed. They used great adjectives and voiced a strong opinion. The second paragraph for instance grabs the reader in and uses great adjectives to decribe listening to music instead of just saying listening to music. That is the object I found most vividly described.
3. The essay's best overall strength was the strong voicing of opinion. They made a great point out there about what they value and why. They used great sentences. For example: "When you say "Country" my heart turns black and the sound of Opera makes me gag."
4. They wrote a great essay with pretty much no mistakes. My one suggestion is to expand their opening paragraph. They should talk a bit more about the concept of value. That is my one suggestion.
You described everything really well, and I can picture it all in my head.
ReplyDeleteThe part where you said "The Walkman is so glossy and lustrous, I can check myself out when necessary. I can even see the germs on my face dancing to the song I am listening to." made me laugh a lot.
You definitely broke my heart when you said that you dont like country. How can anyone not like Taylor Swift? You have a lot to learn, my friend. I agree with you about Opera, though.
I think it's so cute that you wrote about your girlfriend, and the whole thing just made me go "awhhhh!"
I think that overall, it was a really good essay.
In your essay you explain that there are two types of valuable things. There are things of financial value and things of value not related to money. I thought that made a lot of sense. I liked the part in your introduction about the diamond ring you propose with and the actual marrige, that really made me think, and i liked it alot!:)
ReplyDeleteI thought the walkman part was most vivibly described. You went from describing the actual walkman to discussing your favorite genres to how the music made you feel. It was a very well roudned and explained everything about you and your music. It flowed together very well too.
The essay was very strong altogether. But if i had to chose somehting it would be how you used every type of writing. We saw your opinion when you described what type of music we didn't like, we saw romance when you were describing skating with your girlfriend. We even saw humor when you described the germs on your face dancing. That was really clever and made me laugh:)
I really can't find anything wrong with your essay. Except when you said" The slim, black device has 8 gigabytes of memory which is approximately 2,000 songs if you convert into a number of songs." I don't think you really need to include the "if you convert it into a number of songs" part, but other than that the essay was really good!
oh, and the comment you left me on my essay made my day, thank youu!